近年来大学英语四级作文考试题目、考题讨论(6)

在写作的时候，却造出了许多具有严重的语法错误的句子。而且，越是一些基本的语法知识，例如，名词的单复数，第三人称单数形式等等，越容易被忽视。
例如1998年1月的作文 “Harmfulness of Fake Commodities”中的第一段“目前社会上有不少假冒伪劣商品。为什么会有这种现象？”，有的考生这样写：
Nowadays, we are very worried to find out that there are many fake commodities in the society. Why is this possible? I think there are two big reasons: first, some manufacturers are greedy. They are willing to produce fake commodities. They may give their souls to the devil for money. Second, some customers do not have the idea of protecting themselves. After they are cheated, they only cry for a while and do nothing else.
这一段做到了意义基本通顺，虽然没有明显的语法错误，但在选词造句上仍需改进。把它和下面的范文加以对照就能看出其在选词造句方面的明显不足：
Nowadays, it is rather disconcerting to find that there are many fake commodities in the market. How has this phenomenon arisen? I think that there are two major reasons: first, some manufacturers’ greed for money has led to the production of fake commodities. As long as they can make money, they are ready to sell their own souls to the devil. To sell their fake commodities to customers is certainly even easier. Second, some customers’ awareness of self-protection is too weak. Having been deceived by the treacherous manufacturer, customers generally do nothing other than complaining for a while. They never have the thought of taking the cheat to court.
在范文中，“society” 换成了”market”，“this”换成了“this phenomenon”，使名词所指的对象更加具体。”very worried” 换成了”rather disconcerting”，更能表达出内心不安的感受。 “reasons”一般用“major”而不用 “big”表示“主要的，大的”意思。
动词“are willing to produce fake commodities”是因为他们“greedy”， 后边用了动词词组“led to”把这两个句子连接起来，更自然，更富有逻辑性。后文对前文最成功的改进是把前文的“give their souls”换成了“sell their own souls”， 一方面更贴切，另一方面和后面增添的“sell their fake commodities”相对照。此外，后文把前文的“cheated”换成“deceived”，“cry”换成“complain”，都表现了更丰富的用法和更准确的思想。
5. 忽视标点符号的运用
有些作文，通篇没有一个清楚的标点符号，不论在什么句子的后面，都是一律的黑点。
   针对以上情况，建议考生平时应多熟悉英语写作的常识与技巧，多读一些范文，勤于动手多练，熟记一些常用的表达方法，这样才能写出上乘的作文，避免考试时出现错误。